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    dots Submission Name: Invisibledots
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    Author: EL
    Elite Ratio:    3.39 - 272/189/52
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1081
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsInvisibledots
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    With Everyday I stand before you,
    With Every hour I reach out to you,
    With Every minute I spend in your presence,
    Becomes Every second I am ignored,
    Pushed to the side
    Out of your mind
    Pushed into the past
    Out of your sight
    To you I am invisible
    Invisible, Invisible,
    To You!
    I cry, scream,
    I need you!
    But you, you remain deaf,
    Deaf to my needs
    For I am invisible
    Invisible, Invisible
    To You!
    I cry, scream,
    Let me be free!
    But you, you remain deaf,
    Deaf to my pleads,
    Binded, Bounded
    By your empty love!
    I Am Invisible,
    Invisible, Invisible,
    To You!




    Submitted on 2006-08-24 22:03:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow this speaks volumes to me! remindes me of my childhood growing up with the parents I did... this is amazing and the length is wonderful i must say :-D

    ~!*Jackie*!~
    | Posted on 2007-07-02 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
      I've been there myself. It gets better I swear. Life is a good thing if we only give it a shot.
    Anyway great poem!!!
    Kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2006-10-02 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
      This sounds very much on the level of what im going through because my bf, is ignoring me completely...even the emails i send...if this is actually going on and you have a love ignoring you...i definitley feel for you.
    | Posted on 2006-08-24 00:00:00 | by BloodtornAngel | [ Reply to This ]


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