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    dots Submission Name: Fifeless Poetdots
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    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 144
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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       We are all bards and this is a Ode to the Bard inside


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    dotsFifeless Poetdots
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    I am making music, yet I am fifeless.
    I carve my words in the wood, yet I am knifeless.
    Black ink covering my hands,
    As my crippled thoughts begin to stand.
    Rivers running in my bones,
    Of ink and words that are all mine alone.
    My hand is on the pen trail roll,
    I never quite have total control.
    Writing I feel the rhythmic vibrations,
    Of my thought provoking creation.
    As I begin like ones before, my world’s imitation.
    I know in this life I have no true reservation.
    On this paper I remain on staining,
    As ink from my eyes keep raining.
    I know I must grow older.
    With age my words will become bolder.
    Writing wisdom in perfection,
    And my thought’s gentle misdirection.
    Hopefully on this very paper my pen will leave scars,
    And someday help someone find their hidden stars.




    Submitted on 2004-01-26 16:57:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is really good. I enjoyed it from beginning to end.
    | Posted on 2004-01-26 00:00:00 | by kblyric | [ Reply to This ]
      Ooooh, nice. Very nice. I especially like the first two lines, and the admission of lack of control. (I have some similar images in "Find the Music".) Most writers never get that real literature writes itself. We are just the medium through which it is translated into language. Good job! <><
    | Posted on 2004-01-26 00:00:00 | by WorththeWait | [ Reply to This ]


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