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    dots Submission Name: Mirror, Mirrordots
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    Author: precious_poetry
    ASL Info:    19 F TN
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 137/145/67
    Words: 205
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 551
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    Description:
       This is sort of jumbled up and it isn't really consistent with every stanza in matters of length, but I thought it was very nice. Tell me what you think, I would appreciate whatever you would like to say.


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    dotsMirror, Mirrordots
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    Mirror Mirror,
    On the wall,
    Tell me who,
    Is fakest of us all.

    Is it the girl,
    Dressed to impress?
    With the shortest skirt,
    While showing off her breasts?

    Is it the boy,
    With his pants around his knees?
    Walking like hes something,
    While he gives his nuts a squeeze?

    Is it the actor,
    Who pretends not to care?
    Ignoring all around him,
    Enjoying every stare?

    Is it the lawyer,
    Who lies to make ends meet,
    Who shuffles around in a limo,
    So not to harm his fragile feet?

    Is it the preacher,
    Who defies what he speaks,
    He who lives a life of pure sin,
    And prays the lies don't leak?

    Is it the policeman,
    Who protects us day to day,
    Who also breaks the law,
    But innocently goes about his way?

    Is it everyone,
    Who is scared to be what they are,
    Who hides behind their reflections,
    So not to show their scars?

    Tell me wise mirror,
    Why are we focused on attraction?
    Who looks into the mirror,
    For more than physical satisfaction?

    If a mirror could show you,
    What lies beneath the skin,
    All of us know the truth,
    We wouldn't look again.




    Submitted on 2006-08-24 23:28:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow. This poem is so ironic. I really like the emotion again. The rythm is great. I love it. Definately going in my favs. Keep it up :)

    Ciao,

    }i{Renae}i{
    | Posted on 2006-10-20 00:00:00 | by Poetic_tragedy6 | [ Reply to This ]
      lol this has a funny truth to it most people lie to them self trying to pretend their something their not and i think you showed this perfectly lol it made me laugh at the end
    ' If a mirror could show you,
    What lies beneath the skin,
    All of us know the truth,
    We wouldn't look again.'

    becasue its real like it keep up the good work

    Rak^)
    | Posted on 2006-08-25 00:00:00 | by dark figure | [ Reply to This ]


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