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Author: Porcelaine
ASL Info:    27/F/Croatia
Elite Ratio:    3.9 - 880 /703 /256
Words: 119
Class/Type: Poetry /Legend
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Fantasy is my genre of choice. These are the forces that sometimes build fantasy from it's foundations.


Dream asleep and dream awake
Nightmare Child you’re now forsake
Sin of beauty, vow in vain
Silent now, you strain in pain.

Tempest, you, so fierce a force
Gore, destroy with no remorse
As beautiful as cruel you are
Annihilation gray by far.

Renegade of this wide land
Footsteps blown away with sand
Skies are kind to those who seek
To be the strongest when they’re weak.

Creed, you burn in others flame
Forlorn, you renounce your reign
Single heart, a beat, a thought
Cannot stand for what they fought.

Revenant, the souls descend
Bear the future, grieve, amend
End of seasons ‘fore a storm
Died in blood, in blood reborn.

Submitted on 2006-08-25 02:32:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  alot of creative thought way to use imagination, ty
| Posted on 2009-02-27 00:00:00 | by ty | [ Reply to This ]
  I dont see why you put spaces between the verses other than so people could read it easier. Still i do enjoy the sense of isolation. You seem to have listed several aspects of people who would be isolated as well as the title would sugest. Introvertness by describeing them as beautiful yet gray inside. as well as the word renegade. My favorite line is died in blood in blood reborn. A fiting end to one who struggles to find themselves. I know these are founding ideas for fantasty but of course they all are in common in the hero or protagonist searching or struggling to acheive some goal. Good job
| Posted on 2007-07-17 00:00:00 | by Seraphim X | [ Reply to This ]
  I really enjoyed this poem. Mainly the flow, and the imagery. It would just be really nice for some sort of description besides your genre of choice, because many of your poems can be quite confusing to the common reader, like myself. Good write though.
| Posted on 2006-10-09 00:00:00 | by jlpurvis2001 | [ Reply to This ]
  I loved the flow of this poem! It rolled off the tounge like a good wine. Thanks for sharring such great work!!!
Kelley Frost
| Posted on 2006-10-02 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
  That was pretty damn awsome dude. The only real problem I see with this is that second stanza, I think you should redo it, it just doesn't flow like the rest of the poem.. beside that, I pretty much love it, gonna add it to my favorites. keep it up man.

From the Darkest reflection,
| Posted on 2006-08-25 00:00:00 | by Shadow_Mirror | [ Reply to This ]

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