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    dots Submission Name: The Moiraidots
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    Author: MorbidAngel114
    ASL Info:    20/f/Behind you
    Elite Ratio:    3.82 - 445/480/114
    Words: 152
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1049
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       The story of the Fates(also called Moirai). I think it's pretty well written out. If you don't understand, look them up on Wikipedia or somethin.

    This was done in a Collaboration with BCute...


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    dotsThe Moiraidots
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    The spinning wheel goes round and round
    The Fate of life soon to be sealed
    Clotho delicately weaves her thread
    Creating life out of thin air

    The young mortal baby begins to cry
    Holding closely to her chest
    Lachesis draws the cards
    Deciding what this young one shall be

    Breathe deep for what time you have,
    For Atropos spins the ultimate fate,
    Whether the light of another day you'll see,
    Enjoying in other gods' warm grace.

    Or you'll plunge down to Hades deep,
    Where you'll meet the boatman,
    To stand on banks with severed souls,
    Not having two pence to cross Styx- and be whole.

    And so the Moirai continue
    Weaving out humanity
    And all of its being
    The thread of life spinning
    Creating the web of our existence

    Be careful with what you do
    For your thread of Life
    Could very well be severed next




    Submitted on 2006-08-25 03:29:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Man, if I was constantly careful about every thing I did, and constantly worried about what a god see's of my soul, I'd lead a very boring life. If these Moirai people weave life...why can't they make it cool for everyone? Sadistic lil [censored]s they are, HA!

    I liked it and agree it was written well. Not really sure about the last three lines though. I see they were trying to create a moral, but I just dont know if it is needed. Hmmm...just my thoughts though. Nice job both of you.


    | Posted on 2006-08-25 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      Hehehe, now wherever did you come up with this. Oh .... right. It was a collaboration. Between you and I. WOOT! We're so alike it's spooky. I'm not critiquing. I can't critique what is my work with someone elses. So. I'm just typing randomly at 3:30 am...wondering how we wrote this as well as we did at this early an hour.


    BCute

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    | Posted on 2006-08-25 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]
      This was amazing. I really loved it. Very detailed and tells the story well. Great job
    | Posted on 2006-09-07 00:00:00 | by ChimeraNytemare | [ Reply to This ]


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