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My Brothers Blood

Author: James Reyna
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Every man lost in battle really does mean something to someone.

My Brothers Blood

The bullet grazes my skin

No fear, no shock

For they tell me I train to win

As I blaze the desert, my gun cocks

And as I run a brother I see;

On the desert ground; lifeless

And I can't help but think

Of his family and thier unknown crisis

And so calmly I grab his body

And pull it to the side

Clear from all the bombing

So his family can say "goodbye"

Submitted on 2006-08-25 08:52:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  very very touching,i have a childhood friend that is over seas right now and i worry about him incessantly, so this peice really touched a cord with me thank you so much fo posting it, this is a new fave for me i really loved it, even though it is sad at the same time it is also very heroic....Joy
| Posted on 2006-11-15 00:00:00 | by sweet_rayne | [ Reply to This ]
  Very, very touching. A soldier who would risk his own life to bring back the body of someone's friend or loved one is someone worth enormous respect.
Sometimes I wonder where you get your inspiration from. Your works seem to appear sporadically but are all based on very strong, touching subjects. You have a gift, my friend. Dont' lose it.

With Love,
| Posted on 2006-10-04 00:00:00 | by Jacob Seibert | [ Reply to This ]
  Jeeeeez. I wish..I hope that the friends and family I have serving overseas would do this for someone....or someone would do this for us if something were to happen. I've seen family and friends come back to Iraq and go ove rrepeatively.

Soldiers are heros in all senses. You've captured that well.

| Posted on 2006-08-25 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]
  This was extremely sad. It's hard for me to think of all the soldiers out there who risk there lives to save ours, without feeling like I'm going to cry. I recently read an e-mail about how most of us take for granted, all that we have. We sleep in, they stay up for days on end, we take a nice warm long shower, they go for weeks without any water, we complain of a headache or feeling sick, they get shot and wounded. And this, well this just put it even more in perspective. Great work. Very sad, but still, you did a great job at writing this.

| Posted on 2006-08-25 00:00:00 | by PiperH | [ Reply to This ]
  Amazing. This does a very nice job of protraying soldiers. I wish and hope that this goes on over in Iraq. Great writting.
| Posted on 2006-09-02 00:00:00 | by LocketzVC | [ Reply to This ]
  This is very sad. It reminded me about a poem I read once. I can't remember the name or the poet, but if I do, I'll let you know. That was about how very few people care about when one man dies in a war, but there is his friend who sheds one tear, and puts a flower on his body and continues fighting the battle. It was something like this, but both had their different styles.

Very heartfelt,

| Posted on 2006-09-09 00:00:00 | by abuzzbuzz92 | [ Reply to This ]
  This is so good. I love what it is about, and it realy makes you think. Great Write James. Keep it goin'.

| Posted on 2006-08-25 00:00:00 | by S.A.M. | [ Reply to This ]

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