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Where Are The Stars?

Author: James Reyna
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Many times the stress and everyday hastle of life tends to make us miss out on all the little things in life. So today while ur out and about going crazy dealing wit stress just remember that there is a greater force looking out for you.

Where Are The Stars?

Where are the stars?
Among all the city lights
Beyond all the fancy cars
Where are the beautiful sky brights
That some call stars

We come home tired
To deal with life
And can't stop to admire
What God has given us in the sky
And so we lie in bed
With so many things on our mind
But if we wake up and instead
Come to realize there is more to life
Than what meets our eyes

Submitted on 2006-08-25 08:58:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  simple, yet very, very meaningful. wonderful work! your writing's very inspirational. keep it up! <3
| Posted on 2006-11-30 00:00:00 | by everafter | [ Reply to This ]
  Great stuff, man. It reminds me alot of "A Starry Night In Texas," because it has the same feel. Not many people take a break from their busy schedules and just look and admire the beauty of nature. That's what I love about Texas. At my grandpa's property, I can sit in the field in the back and see the city lights, but still see thousands of stars. It's really a beautiful mixture. But, on topic, this was a very nice write. Keep up the good work.

With Love,
| Posted on 2006-10-04 00:00:00 | by Jacob Seibert | [ Reply to This ]
  This is so true. You can never see the stars when you really want to. Looking at the stars helps me when I get stressed out. Or else just like you said, to admire them. Great write. I loved it.
| Posted on 2006-09-24 00:00:00 | by dreamer37517 | [ Reply to This ]
  I enjoyed reading this. It was very insightful to the polution and everything that troubles our ir above our heads. The stars are beautiful, I'm fortunate enough to live in a small town, and alos my dad livs in the country so we get a clear view of the stars. Very wherthy for a poem. Great job and keep writing.
| Posted on 2006-08-30 00:00:00 | by Caotic_Disaster | [ Reply to This ]
Very Nicely said
My only wish is that people would realize just how beatiful life can be if we all only opened up our Hearts and let the Love of The Lord inside
I was living a life of hell weighed down with addiction on Deaths doorstep and the day one year and three moths ago today that I invited the Lord into my Life I became free of addiction and I swear To you I have never been happier in Life
The Lords Love has saved me and delivered me a positive new world free from the harmful effects of Negativity
I Thank Him every chance I Get James
God Bless
Your Friend
| Posted on 2006-09-02 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
  I think this is just beautiful. I love skygazing myself and if I could I would spend much time lying flat on my back simply watching the night sky. But... blah!... the city lights and pollution and a zillion other unimportant excuses interfere. but apart from the literal meaning, i like the deeper question this piece asks. is life's happiness dependent on the 'big' successes? does money, fame and the usual clichés bring happiness? i do not think so - it may make us more comfortable - but unless we have a disposition to find beauty and joy in things that are already here (which no money can buy), we may find the 'happiness' fleeting. as a corollary, big disasters and daily miseries ought not to trouble us if we can find this beauty all around. in theory anyway!

good write. this made me think.
| Posted on 2006-08-26 00:00:00 | by Judy | [ Reply to This ]
  I loved it. And everyone can learn something from this. Life can be stressful at times, I can certainly relate to that, but we have to remember to look on the positive side of things.

Great poem. I loved the words and the rhyming thing you did. Thankyou for a good read.

| Posted on 2006-08-25 00:00:00 | by PiperH | [ Reply to This ]
  Nature can be a great retreat from all worldly problems. The way you wrote this complimented the message well. Stars really fasinate me. Once I went into a "Spacetorium" where they had a roof which looked like the solar system; and although they had done it pretty well, nothing could capture the real beauty of the skies; but your poem came pretty close

much more love,

| Posted on 2006-09-09 00:00:00 | by abuzzbuzz92 | [ Reply to This ]
  This sort of sounds like something written when on the roof of your house with your friends and looking out into the vast skies. Not bad of a poem, it sorta gets away from you though as you read. But nothing drastic and it conjours up feelings of being outside with friends. How about adding: Your teeth are like the stars, do they come out at night too? LOL only kidding, my father always says that, I thought I would add it in. Hope it made you laugh...
| Posted on 2006-08-25 00:00:00 | by Molly Densmore | [ Reply to This ]

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