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    Author: lynn7
    Elite Ratio:    3.2 - 297/212/58
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    the rain falls, once again
    this time with consuming fire
    each drop releases pain
    both of loss and of gain
    the flood comes on like a force
    that can mean destruction
    if not properly handled with care

    how can pure love, bring so much pain
    but yet.. Feel so comforting and secure
    in the depth of my soul
    i search for you
    to see you coming near
    as a beloved reaching for his bride

    the rain is now settling down
    the sun is peaking through
    to bring peace and cleansing
    but in the distance you can still hear
    the thunder reminding us, of the storm




    Submitted on 2006-08-25 09:57:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Love can sure be compared to many things. Comparing it to rain and a thunderstorm is very apt, as the road to love is usually a rocky one and the vast majority of relationships hit the rocks and encounter many thunderstorms.

    You brought this out very well Lynn. A very good write from you.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2006-08-27 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this was written pretty good. I really liked how compared rain with consuming fire and pain it created really good imaginery. At first when I started to read it I didn't think it would be about passion or love... I mean at first it doesn't seem like it would be about that... so the words carried the reader pretty good I think. =]

    Also, I liked how you ended with the storm passing by... and the rain slowing down.. but yet still hearing the thunder. :)... definately one of my favs lol.

    -m.m-
    | Posted on 2006-08-25 00:00:00 | by MidnightMelody | [ Reply to This ]
      hi, very odd, fire and rain, not really joined well, but i got the message. tom
    | Posted on 2006-09-03 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]


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