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    dots Submission Name: acid butterflydots

    Author: blu_kittin
    ASL Info:    20/F/Garden of Eden
    Elite Ratio:    6.15 - 711/397/207
    Words: 67
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
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    dotsacid butterflydots

    purples, pinks
    such a minx
    you're so mean
    thought you would stay to play
    but instead you flew away
    brightest blue
    i want you
    so delicate
    caught in a little net
    reddest rose
    lands on my nose
    orange and electric lime
    c'mon its play time
    butter yellow
    oh so mellow
    swirly whirly
    some are pearly
    swimming in a tye dye field
    ma and my psycadelic shield

    Submitted on 2006-08-25 14:55:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      lol it was really creative.

    good write

    | Posted on 2006-08-30 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]
      i love the title for this, and the flow is great. awesome imagery on this one hun. keep writing :)
    | Posted on 2006-09-01 00:00:00 | by Jenni Bean | [ Reply to This ]

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