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    dots Submission Name: Stuffdots
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    Author: BenCollier
    Elite Ratio:    3.72 - 425/386/88
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Prose/Serious
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    Description:
       Just stuff, mostly non sensical, maybe something hidden? Je nais se pas?


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    dotsStuffdots
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    The latest hi tech gizmo and a half eaten taco
    iPod Nano on a rope
    Tivo sausages served two days old
    An Apple isn't just a fruit

    DVD pirates on cheep cut crank
    VCR junkies too old to pop
    My phone is chocolate
    Bluetooth isn't really blue

    An Lp is just vinyl dust covered and old
    The HiFI waxed poetically but not really
    As the 8 track faded into obscurity




    Submitted on 2006-08-25 14:58:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Thanks for youer comments on "Season's Change--". I fiqured to return the compliment and luckily I picked this little gem.

    What a great trip back in the past by considering technology. It made me laugh and think of my own evolution through the modern world. Thanks for sharing. --oixi
    | Posted on 2006-08-29 00:00:00 | by oixi | [ Reply to This ]
      interesting prospective on todays technology. i thought i would return the favor and read one of your writes.

    Diary
    | Posted on 2006-08-25 00:00:00 | by Diarygrl | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a clever write. I enjoyed reading this and the way you tie in these new technologies with a little pun. My god how things have changed over the years. I feel like I am so old just because of all the changes that have happened with technology. It seems crazy to think of how life was when I was a child and how it is now for someone who is a child. So much new stuff all the time, I can barely keep up. I found this line very clever...

    Tivo sausages served two days old

    Hee hee! This write made me smile. And I love the end with all the out of date kinda stuff we used to consider Hi Tech. haha! Good work.

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2006-08-25 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]


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