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    dots Submission Name: Act of Contritiondots
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    Author: Sans Everything
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    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Poetry/Religious
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    dotsAct of Contritiondots
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    Why are we so afraid of silence?
    Are we afraid to let our souls be free?
    Relying on the noise to be our safeguard
    Afraid that God will want to speak to me
    What if He urges us to change our lives?
    Can I give up the ways I've come to love?
    I'm so afraid to let You take over
    To place my trust in the plan from up above
    No, I cannot give in, I refuse!
    There is too much risk of pain and tears
    Now, I can hide beneath the shadows
    I can't destroy what I've built up for years
    Give me strength to trust in You
    Grant me the grace to surrender completely
    I hope You will forgive me of my sins
    Let me return to You on bended knee




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      Deep, I will give it that. However, perhaps I am just not smart enough but I cannot grasp the meaning. Is it an hommage to Jesus Christ? IF so than I think it is well done. Being afraid of silence and letting our souls free kinda threw me. I liked the beginning but I din't expect the religous overtones. Maybe you can elaborate for me.

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    ben
    | Posted on 2006-08-25 00:00:00 | by BenCollier | [ Reply to This ]
      i like the meaning of this poem and the whole imagery of surrendering to God is well-sustained and support [to say the least]. yet i dont quite agree with the one stanza poem. even though you are obviously thinking and this is somewat a stream of consciousness, i drather it was separated into 3 stanzas maybe and perhaps it would also help the poem flow more.:)
    | Posted on 2006-08-25 00:00:00 | by neonlights | [ Reply to This ]


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