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    dots Submission Name: Heart Liesdots
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    Author: od9.1.04
    ASL Info:    15/f/oh
    Elite Ratio:    1.68 - 18/38/19
    Words: 170
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 892
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1167



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    dotsHeart Liesdots
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    I don't want you today.
    I don't want you tomorrow.
    Why did you stay..
    When you saw you were my sorrow?

    I dont' want you now.
    I didn't want you then.
    You never showed me how..
    It could of been.

    I don't want your lies.
    I don't want this mess.
    No more nights I'll cry...
    About all my weighted stress.

    I don't want to move on.
    I don't want someone new.
    I'll regret it when your gone...
    It'll hurt to be without you.

    I don't want you.
    I don't want you to leave.
    My heart isn't telling what's true...
    It's breaking piece by piece.

    I don't want you to see.
    I don't want you to know.
    Then you might want to leave...
    What my heart can't show.

    I want to have love to share.
    I want to have someone with who I can be.
    To have someone who cares...
    Someone to be with forever happily.











    Submitted on 2006-08-25 19:14:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      that was such a touching piece to read. i understand it when your heart lies, and you regret what you left behind. thanx for sharin, it is helpin me.
    ali
    | Posted on 2006-08-26 00:00:00 | by Ali Marie | [ Reply to This ]
      this is really good. you did a good job on it. very emotional. Joanna
    | Posted on 2006-08-25 00:00:00 | by heartless_ | [ Reply to This ]
      this is very original
    and well written
    =]
    | Posted on 2006-08-26 00:00:00 | by Evonna Findley | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, that's... Really *really* good. I'm adding it to my favorites! I loved it! Good job!
    -Missy
    | Posted on 2006-08-25 00:00:00 | by Pabapfc | [ Reply to This ]


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