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    dots Submission Name: Suicidal Lonersdots
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    Author: Mr. Creep
    ASL Info:    16. Female. Here
    Elite Ratio:    1.97 - 96/177/112
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 770
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    Description:
       why people are suicidal


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    dotsSuicidal Lonersdots
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    She broke down day by day,
    every minute before the last.
    No one ever expected it,
    her twisted mind was caught in past.

    There is never a good enough reason,
    but it happens every day.
    What happend to this girl,
    it happens every way.

    Paralized by silence,
    they get caught up in sorrow.
    Lies of a past life,
    effect their last tomorrow.

    The suicidal loners,
    I dont blame they're choices.
    The world's air is the same as Hell's,
    and we drowned out their voices.





    Submitted on 2006-08-25 19:33:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Ahh! That was great! I'm gonna check out your other stuff. If you think this deeply about this poem, then your others must rock too!
    -Missy
    | Posted on 2006-08-25 00:00:00 | by Pabapfc | [ Reply to This ]
      You really are deep aren't you? I like that. This poem is descriptive in a way that you don't really need a lot of words to say what you're trying to say. I really liked the while poem. Awsome job.
    | Posted on 2006-08-27 00:00:00 | by Foreseer | [ Reply to This ]


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