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Suicidal Loners


Author: Mr. Creep
ASL Info:    16. Female. Here
Elite Ratio:    1.97 - 96 /177 /112
Words: 89
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Average Vote:    5.0000
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Description:


why people are suicidal


Suicidal Loners



She broke down day by day,
every minute before the last.
No one ever expected it,
her twisted mind was caught in past.

There is never a good enough reason,
but it happens every day.
What happend to this girl,
it happens every way.

Paralized by silence,
they get caught up in sorrow.
Lies of a past life,
effect their last tomorrow.

The suicidal loners,
I dont blame they're choices.
The world's air is the same as Hell's,
and we drowned out their voices.





Submitted on 2006-08-25 19:33:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Ahh! That was great! I'm gonna check out your other stuff. If you think this deeply about this poem, then your others must rock too!
-Missy
| Posted on 2006-08-25 00:00:00 | by Pabapfc | [ Reply to This ]
  You really are deep aren't you? I like that. This poem is descriptive in a way that you don't really need a lot of words to say what you're trying to say. I really liked the while poem. Awsome job.
| Posted on 2006-08-27 00:00:00 | by Foreseer | [ Reply to This ]


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