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    dots Submission Name: Headondots
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    Author: BenCollier
    Elite Ratio:    3.72 - 425/386/88
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Prose/Serious
    Total Views: 944
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       I was just in a weird mood, realizing something that pushed me as a kid. I think this is somewhat haphazard but try to look through the words. Feel the blood lust drive a man can feel when backed into a corner


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    dotsHeadondots
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    Headon into futility, the drive spurs devine
    A obsession for victory, the enemy overwhelms
    Forgone self protection, his will is steeled
    Drive to accomplish, admonish no failure

    When all is lost what drives a man?
    Guile, Guile, the fuel of despondancy
    For that which is in all of us distinguishes
    A leader from follower, one who will win
    Who's will is charismatic and compells

    An obstacle, a barrier, the prison of defeat
    Fires his push, fuels his nerve
    No barrier is complete
    Cannot extinguish the guile
    Headon into glory




    Submitted on 2006-08-26 11:02:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Wow. And you are absolutely right, the world does indeed adore those with charisma and victory in their hearts. And we are never quite content with whatever we do have. This is well-written, but I was a bit confused at some of your vocabulary- despondancy, for instance. Nevertheless, a good work, and keep it up.
    | Posted on 2006-09-03 00:00:00 | by Aurora-Borealis | [ Reply to This ]


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