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Before you and Now

Author: Star
ASL Info:    15 F WI
Elite Ratio:    2.69 - 125 /127 /42
Words: 118
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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umm well this is about my boyfriend and my feelings and yeah tell me what ya think thanks

Before you and Now

My life before you...
was riddled with chaos and uncertainty
but now a calm and understanding
have taken their place
No longer does depression
weigh me down like before
I am finally able to breathe
without cares or fears choking me
These feelings worry me though,
for the fear that I could lose you
and sink back down to what I once
used to feel scares me more than you could ever know
These thoughts are usually far from my mind
because I dont want to think that way
because that is how I used to be, the old me
I love you and NEVER want to be without you or the love you bring me

Submitted on 2006-08-26 13:41:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I like the flow and the depiction of before and after. Light always has a hint of dark to it doesn't it.. Well done and simply yet strongly put.
| Posted on 2006-08-27 00:00:00 | by trynfinity | [ Reply to This ]
  Nicely written. I thought that the title was very clever, it drew people in and kept them there to read. I think that it was unique, but a little dark to be called a love poem. Not that I think that it is a bad thing. I enjoyed reading this, and I thik it is a feeling that people can relate to, well atleast I can. Good job and continue to write.
| Posted on 2006-08-29 00:00:00 | by Caotic_Disaster | [ Reply to This ]

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