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    dots Submission Name: Before you and Nowdots
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    Author: Star
    ASL Info:    15 F WI
    Elite Ratio:    2.69 - 125/127/42
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 875
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 688



    Description:
       umm well this is about my boyfriend and my feelings and yeah tell me what ya think thanks


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    dotsBefore you and Nowdots
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    My life before you...
    was riddled with chaos and uncertainty
    but now a calm and understanding
    have taken their place
    No longer does depression
    weigh me down like before
    I am finally able to breathe
    without cares or fears choking me
    These feelings worry me though,
    for the fear that I could lose you
    and sink back down to what I once
    used to feel scares me more than you could ever know
    These thoughts are usually far from my mind
    because I dont want to think that way
    because that is how I used to be, the old me
    I love you and NEVER want to be without you or the love you bring me




    Submitted on 2006-08-26 13:41:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like the flow and the depiction of before and after. Light always has a hint of dark to it doesn't it.. Well done and simply yet strongly put.
    | Posted on 2006-08-27 00:00:00 | by trynfinity | [ Reply to This ]
      Nicely written. I thought that the title was very clever, it drew people in and kept them there to read. I think that it was unique, but a little dark to be called a love poem. Not that I think that it is a bad thing. I enjoyed reading this, and I thik it is a feeling that people can relate to, well atleast I can. Good job and continue to write.
    ~Caotic~
    | Posted on 2006-08-29 00:00:00 | by Caotic_Disaster | [ Reply to This ]


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