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    dots Submission Name: The Euphoric Swandots

    Author: _taateli_
    ASL Info:    18/F/Finland
    Elite Ratio:    4.78 - 84/113/29
    Words: 170
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 937
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1357

       A quick glance, and Think Thought Thought, though I didn't get the yearned full score.

    And her mind is the one of a butterfly's or a fairy's.

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    dotsThe Euphoric Swandots


    Have you seen
    the Old Pictures?
    with the little ballerina;
    in the white skirt of tulle
    and the dance
    of her life
    in Palais Garnier –
    she was already fading
    into the distance.

    And Lebedinoje Ozero
    made her toes ache

    Did you notice, Then?
    Palais Garnier altered
    into a water-closet
    with the little ballerina;
    her mind did pop.
    And she crumbled
    on the cold bathroom floor
    to kill the loneliness
    killing it with something.
    no –
    with someone;

    it must’ve been the Nervosa

    Have you heard, the Now?
    It is Le Club Absinth
    And the little ballerina;
    her toes still ache.
    She can not remember
    another than the Euphoria –
    To be slender!
    To be frail!
    Ah the Euphoria!

    “I know I cannot be happy if not”,
    is the phrase,
    and she only has her fingernails.
    And the little ballerina –

    she’s my Heroine

    Submitted on 2006-08-26 17:31:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Right, you're not a poet. I like this. Very meandering, yet gripping. Good visuals. Keep working on your style, cus you are close to perfecting it.
    Also enjoy your pic. Good bone structure in that cute face!
    | Posted on 2007-02-23 00:00:00 | by Jbills | [ Reply to This ]
      well my friend this is an interesting piece, i like the imagery of the little ballerina who flits in and out of my life just as she does with you. I have a copy of this painting in my office and she follows me everywhere l go, dancing for me as she turns to the music in her mind.
    Her poor feet must be sore by now. Lets hope she can get some rest!
    A nice poem well put together and very thought provoliong and highly enjoyable.
    Best Wishes
    | Posted on 2006-08-27 00:00:00 | by Colin Douglas | [ Reply to This ]

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