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    dots Submission Name: Intergalactationdots
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    Author: eliwhitneyradio
    Elite Ratio:    3.15 - 49/51/13
    Words: 157
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
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    Intergelactation (or)
    Milking Away in the Milky Way

    Without waking up, I swat away
    the ghosts of surgeons. Their eyes
    stitched shut by sunlight, the lashes
    prod for nightmares to tickle. Like
    the skeleton of a gymnast dismounting
    the corpse she's still wearing.

    Navigator, stick the landing gear in my skull,
    the stained runway of a grave dug backwards. A
    pilot's lunchbox packed with the leftover
    splatters of four planets microwaved
    on high for a month.

    What a big fucking microwave...

    when the beep rang, the universe's
    hands covered everyone's ears.
    They watched birds with beaked anchors
    sink into a sea of solar skepticism.

    In a galaxy of mistrust,
    I hiss at skies with cat food eyes,
    snatch lightning bolts
    then snap the spines, swallow
    clouds like pills disguised, and
    vomit thunder pasteurized.

    Please enjoy your cereal.








    Submitted on 2006-08-26 19:26:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      A taste of irony in here that I can't quite recognize. I liked this piece. I'm sure I didn't fully understand it, if that is even a possibility, but I enjoyed it.

    {Kate}
    | Posted on 2006-08-26 00:00:00 | by Jester_Gesture | [ Reply to This ]


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