Running Scared

Author: Hip-Hop Honey ASL Info:    16/f/canada Elite Ratio:    3.51 - 105 /86 /31 Words: 88

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Running Scared

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A dream come true Is all I have Left of you These tears sting my eyes Who's going to be here for me And show they care Without you here I have fears Need strength to conquer What I feel What I feel is this girls beat The broken sound of a heartbeat But no need to worry Cuz while your gone I'll carry on Live my life the way it was Hopefully without you here I don't go running scared

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You really express your sense of loss well. Writing about emotion is so commonplace nowadays that it is ealily faked. It is good to see a piece that is so sincere. I like the title tie in also. When it is viewed with the last line I think it adds dimension to your poem.

| Posted on 2006-08-28 00:00:00 | by 4rum | [ Reply to This ]

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