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Running Scared


Author: Hip-Hop Honey
ASL Info:    16/f/canada
Elite Ratio:    3.51 - 105 /86 /31
Words: 88
Class/Type: Poetry /
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This poem is how I feel about Mylo I found out he is moving to the states and I just needed someone to hear what I have to say hope you like it


Running Scared



A dream come true
Is all I have
Left of you
These tears sting my eyes
Who's going to be here for me
And show they care
Without you here I have fears
Need strength to conquer
What I feel
What I feel is this girls beat
The broken sound of a heartbeat
But no need to worry
Cuz while your gone I'll carry on
Live my life the way it was
Hopefully without you here
I don't go running scared







Submitted on 2006-08-26 22:07:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  You really express your sense of loss well. Writing about emotion is so commonplace nowadays that it is ealily faked. It is good to see a piece that is so sincere. I like the title tie in also. When it is viewed with the last line I think it adds dimension to your poem.
| Posted on 2006-08-28 00:00:00 | by 4rum | [ Reply to This ]


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