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    dots Submission Name: Running Scareddots

    Author: Hip-Hop Honey
    ASL Info:    16/f/canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.51 - 105/86/31
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       This poem is how I feel about Mylo I found out he is moving to the states and I just needed someone to hear what I have to say hope you like it

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    dotsRunning Scareddots

    A dream come true
    Is all I have
    Left of you
    These tears sting my eyes
    Who's going to be here for me
    And show they care
    Without you here I have fears
    Need strength to conquer
    What I feel
    What I feel is this girls beat
    The broken sound of a heartbeat
    But no need to worry
    Cuz while your gone I'll carry on
    Live my life the way it was
    Hopefully without you here
    I don't go running scared

    Submitted on 2006-08-26 22:07:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You really express your sense of loss well. Writing about emotion is so commonplace nowadays that it is ealily faked. It is good to see a piece that is so sincere. I like the title tie in also. When it is viewed with the last line I think it adds dimension to your poem.
    | Posted on 2006-08-28 00:00:00 | by 4rum | [ Reply to This ]

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