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    dots Submission Name: condemning my souldots
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    Author: Rhiees
    Elite Ratio:    0.93 - 0/0/2
    Words: 207
    Class/Type: Personal Quotes/Dark
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       what could you hate more- your soul or guilt?


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    dotscondemning my souldots
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    Time and time again
    I've wept, I weep
    through the silent drawling nights
    with struggling stars and obscured moons
    and hopeful callings of the carrying winds.

    I crave a birth within my soul
    that shall shine my truth
    and illuminate that which tears and gnaws
    deeper than any wrenching guilt

    But I cannot deny,
    Nay, it is below me to deny
    that I have faulted; sinned,
    For I too, am human
    although, by wisdom
    my flaws are greater
    greater than any breath
    greater than any life

    * * *

    The sweet sun struggles
    fluttering its long lashes
    squinting into my rotten heart

    Though my expressions
    have not changed for days on end,
    I smile.
    A bitter, satisfying smile.

    I stare at the wondrous, taunting glisten
    of the friendly blade-

    my smile sneers.

    Upon my hand, upon my neck
    Ah, what sweet sensations;
    cool, devilishly cool.

    I press lightly
    Ah, what warmth
    red warmth that gushes
    the rush of ecstasy.

    My vampire friend is fed.




    Submitted on 2006-08-27 08:07:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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