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    dots Submission Name: ** Creationdots

    Author: Caotic_Disaster
    ASL Info:    16/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 447/349/148
    Words: 64
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 546
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       I'm searching for a title for this. If anyone has any suggestions, I will take them with open arms. Thanks for everyone whohas been commenting. Hope you enjoy. (Creation is a title suggested to me, tell me if you think it's good or not)

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    dots** Creationdots

    Fingers gliding across
    Small platforms
    To produce a
    Legendary king ruling
    A poverty-stricken village
    Or a notorious composition
    Representing a lost love
    Who is only seen in the
    Form of characters sprawled
    Out barren on a
    Transparent sheet
    Shown on a
    Lifeless apparatus
    Whom knows not
    Of the depth
    Which it diplays
    For the world to

    Submitted on 2006-08-27 12:03:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    I don't know the poem itself seemed to speak of the art of creating someting. That's why I came up with that title. Please don't feel as if you have to use it, that was just off the top of my head and the first emotion I got off the poem. The fingers gliding across is what really got to me. Almost as if you were speaking of everything that you go through to create something. I sometimes do this with my poetry. Just close my eyes and let my mind wander and touch whatever things have occurred in my life and, what will I write about? Pain, love, humor? Who knows...for the fingertips of the mind stretch far deeper than I ever figured they would.

    | Posted on 2006-08-27 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]

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