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    dots Submission Name: Foreverdots
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    Author: jennah
    ASL Info:    19/F/IL
    Elite Ratio:    4.07 - 101/73/22
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Poetry/Sorry
    Total Views: 739
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       This is my first year away at college, and I have a friend who is having a hard time with the fact that I am not there anymore. This poem is for her. Sephe, I love you and I miss you and I will always be here.


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    dotsForeverdots
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    Looking out my window,
    staring at the rain,
    I wish for just one moment
    that I was home again.

    That I could just pick up the phone
    and know that you were near.
    That I could sit and laugh with you,
    instead of wishing you were here.

    I wish that I could tell you
    just how much I care.
    Knowing that I've caused you pain
    is almost to much to bear.

    I'm sorry that I had to leave,
    but one day you will too.
    Soon enough, your own path
    will open up for you.

    Maybe then, you'll understand
    just why it had to end,
    and realize that though I'm gone
    I'll always be your friend.




    Submitted on 2006-08-27 13:44:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      now i sit and cry as i think of the pain inside
    this was great but i had one critic
    in the next to the last stance you lost the flow of your words a bit with just i a little rewording this would be perfect
    but over all i loved this !
    | Posted on 2006-08-27 00:00:00 | by DonKB | [ Reply to This ]
      Jenna Marie!

    You're not supposed to write like you're dead! *hugs* Call me! You know I don't turn the phone off because I'm lazy! Gahh...Well, it was a good poem, but more of a random thought that wasn't so random.

    Cheers,
    ~Persephone~
    | Posted on 2006-08-27 00:00:00 | by Persephone | [ Reply to This ]
      Jenna, this poem is wonderfull. Its one of those poems that can be applied to a million situatios, and be as deep and moving in any of them. I like how the poem is dark but at the same time has a hopefull tone to it.

    Luv ya
    Selene
    | Posted on 2006-08-27 00:00:00 | by Selene | [ Reply to This ]


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