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    dots Submission Name: WHAT TO DOdots

    Author: bigrig0625
    ASL Info:    34 M Tx
    Elite Ratio:    2.96 - 40/73/19
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 861
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 738

       Made this up as I went! lol

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    dotsWHAT TO DOdots

    What to do
    What to do

    Write a poem
    Or come in two

    Make it simple
    Make it plain

    Now and then
    I go insane

    I love to write
    I love to read

    It's what I do
    It's what I need

    My thoughts just flow
    With simple rhyme

    To clear my head
    To pass the time

    But who will read
    My candid script

    With simple words
    And thoughts not flipped

    So you can read them
    If you dare

    But what to do
    I do not care


    Submitted on 2006-08-27 15:22:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I really admire people that can rhyme. I can't. You have summed what a poet is and why. We write so we don't "come in two", "go insane" - it is what we need. I like the format of this one too. The format is very simple, the rhyming is great, the message is clear - another one of your works that I would say needs no changes in any way. I know we're supposed to suggest improvements, but if it doesn't need any, I'm not suggesting any.
    | Posted on 2006-09-02 00:00:00 | by Lisa Milligan | [ Reply to This ]
      Not as good as LOCKED IN THE ATTIC, but still pretty good. Shallow, but nice rhyme scheme and stuff from having come straight from your head to the site. It was ok. Good job and keep writing.
    | Posted on 2006-08-28 00:00:00 | by Caotic_Disaster | [ Reply to This ]

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