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    dots Submission Name: Waves Crash, Warm Sanddots
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    Author: Lisa Milligan
    ASL Info:    48/F/VA
    Elite Ratio:    3.71 - 38/47/21
    Words: 506
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Longing
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    dotsWaves Crash, Warm Sanddots
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    Waves crash, warm sand
    Gold ring, your hand
    I can't stay
    Away from you
    But I know my place

    You held my shaking body
    Regret etched in your face
    You know youíre not where you belong
    But when youíre here
    You belong to me
    I can't make it go away
    Not with the wine or the others
    Or the lies I tell myself
    About how I'm just lonely
    And any man will do
    Those words sound empty and hollow
    I know what I want
    And it's you
    Cold white wine in crystal
    While the fire crackles and glows
    And my need for you grows
    From the moment you leave my bed
    The tension builds
    Until I finally feel you inside me again
    Caress your satin
    Savor the taste of your kiss
    Your breath against my thigh
    Watching you
    Watching me
    You make me a little crazy

    Waves crash, warm sand
    Gold ring, your hand
    I can't stay
    Away from you
    But I know my place

    There's a difference
    Between feeling guilty and regret
    Regret would be a knife in my soul
    It's easier to let go
    If the words of goodbye
    Don't drop between us like heavy stones
    Building an unscaleable wall

    But we go back to reality
    Who can say why
    Life pulls two people together
    I hate being trapped in this busy room
    I don't need to turn around
    To know you've walked in
    I feel your eye's caress
    That grabs me by the heart
    And suddenly there's no air in this room
    And I can't hear what anyone is saying
    Over the pounding of my heart
    And I can't see anything
    But your smile

    Even though itís sweet torture to be near you
    Even if I have to settle for feeling your eyes on me
    Where I want your hands to be
    Where I want your breath to be
    Even though you make me feel a little crazy
    Here I stay

    I can't forget those nights
    The sound of your guitar
    I can't forget how you taste
    And how you feel
    Or the look on your face when you're inside
    The look that makes my heart move
    I don't know if it's beating harder
    Or turning over
    Or breaking
    But it hurts
    I know making love isn't a contract
    I gave you my heart
    It's not something you can give back
    Caught in the moment like a rabbit in a snare
    You lean over me and reach for the seashells we collected
    In small paper cups
    The touch of your hand blows me away
    Your breath on my cheek blows me apart
    I want to race away from you like a sandpiper from the waves
    But I'll let the passion I feel for you
    Crash like waves all over my body
    As I sit here acting unaffected

    Waves crash, warm sand
    Gold ring, your hand
    I can't stay
    Away from you
    But I know my place




    Submitted on 2006-08-27 16:26:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Its my turn to be the reader. For, I think you are a far better writer than I could ever dream of being.

    This was sad. The ways I could relate to it. Yet, it was beautifully tragic. All the love, pent up passion, regret, defeat, bitterness. I could feel it all boiling RIGHT under the surface of the words.

    You painted a picture and the repeat of the one stanza really got to me the furthur into the piece I got.

    Hopelessness. That I think might have been the strongest emotion echoing through this beautiful masterpiece.

    BCute<3
    | Posted on 2006-08-27 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]
      It means alot to me when my humble words can evoke feelings from someone. But there's no way I'm a better writer than you. I say you're better, but let's just call it a tie!
    | Posted on 2006-08-27 00:00:00 | by Lisa Milligan | [ Reply to This ]


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