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    dots Submission Name: Bye Mommydots
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    Author: Lisa Milligan
    ASL Info:    48/F/VA
    Elite Ratio:    3.71 - 38/47/21
    Words: 620
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 841
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 3506



    Description:
       I've been told this can be a little hard to follow.

    When I had to leave my son in daycare many years ago, at about age 3, they taught him to say "Bye Mommy, I'll be fine" as he cried when I left. Then I would drive to work in tears. You think it gets easier as time goes on, but it doesn't - until he got older.

    So when you read a verse with "I", that's the son and when it's "she" that's the mom. In other words, this is written with a male and female voice.


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    She said when I was born that all her dreams came true
    But there was one dream that fell apart that day
    She vowed he let her down for the final time
    Without a backward glance she packed us up and walked away
    I was just a baby when she left me in daycare
    I didn't understand what bills were or why she went away
    As I held her tight, she stroked my head and held me close
    And the teachers taught me how to say,

    "Bye Mommy, I'll be fine."
    I remember her voice whispering to me,
    "That's my good boy. You take care now.
    I really wish I didn't have to leave.
    How Iíll miss you, be so glad to see you.
    Be as strong as I know that you can be."
    "Bye Mommy."

    You should have seen my mom that sunny autumn day
    I thought that she would just burst with her pride
    I was off to go to college, a brand new way of life
    I saw through her smile to the tears she tried to hide
    Here I was her baby and I was leaving with my friends
    But she understood why I had to go away
    As she held me tight, I stroked her hair and held her close
    I could feel how she forced herself to say,

    "Bye Honey, Iíll be fine."
    I whispered so they wouldn't laugh at me,
    "Iím still youíre good boy. You take care now.
    I know you wish I didn't have to leave.
    Mom, I'll miss you, be so glad to see you,
    Be as strong as I wish that I could be.
    Bye Mommy."

    When I fell in love I knew my mom would love her too
    I couldn't wait to bring her home when school was done
    On our wedding day she gently took the hands of my bride
    Said, "You're the best thing that's ever happened to my son."
    Her baby was a man now and would have babies of his own
    And she understood why we had to move away
    As I held her tight and stroked her hair, she held me close
    And again I felt her force herself to say,

    "Bye Honey, Iíll be fine."
    I remember her voice whispering to me,
    "You're a good boy. You take care now."
    "Mom, I know you wish I didn't have to leave."
    "Son, I'll miss you, can't wait to see you,
    Be as strong as I know that you can be.
    Bye Honey,"

    Itís late now and it's time to leave this quiet resting place
    I lay her favorite yellow roses softly on her grave
    I'm off to learn to live without her, a brand new way of life
    And I know that she would want me to be brave
    I had to tell my son his grandma's gone for good
    He doesn't understand what Heaven is or why sheís gone away
    I wish just one more time I could stroke her hair and hold her close
    In the darkness I have to force myself to say,

    "Bye Mommy. I'll beÖfine.Ē
    Her voice whispers in the wind to me,
    "That's my good boy. You take care now."
    "But Mom, I really wish you didn't have to leave.
    How I'll miss you, can't wait Ďtil we meet again
    ĎTil then I'll be as strong as you taught me to be
    Bye Mommy..."




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    ||| Comments |||
      Oh my eyes are so teary i could bearly finish reading this. It's so beautiful and sad and true all at the same time. This poem really tears at my soul. It such a wonderful story. It is such a compelling piece anyone who reads it i doesn't stop to think about it is heartless. Wonderful job!!!
    | Posted on 2006-08-27 00:00:00 | by smartblond | [ Reply to This ]
      Jesus....
    I wasn't going to cry today. And, here I am. Sobbing.

    Good grief. I hope I have somebody that loves me as much as a son loves his mother someday.

    You captured th emotions well and wrote a story. It flowed, it moved, it pierced. Lordy.

    I'm breathless for the tears.

    I don't know what to say....everything I wanted to just flew out the window.

    BCute<3
    | Posted on 2006-08-27 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]
      I know everyone else has already said that they cried, but I'll say it too. I CRIED!! All I could think about was how I can't wait to feel that way. I normally don't really like these kind of poems, but this one was a compliment to all the others (I hope that made sense) I'm going to add this to my favorites just so I can show it to my friends. This was well written, and I can't wait to read some of your work. This was sooo moving. LOVED IT!!
    ~Alyssa~
    | Posted on 2006-08-28 00:00:00 | by alcoholcaust | [ Reply to This ]


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