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    dots Submission Name: Forgetdots
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    Author: Lisa Milligan
    ASL Info:    48/F/VA
    Elite Ratio:    3.71 - 38/47/21
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 795
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 650



    Description:
       Unrequited love


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    dotsForgetdots
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    The way you looked at me...
    Warm brown eyes shining across a blue tiled table
    The warmth of your hand
    The fragrant smell of grass and rain

    I watched your lips with longing
    A smile like diamonds in my eyes
    A smile I'll have to forget

    A story with no beginning...or end
    Just a look on my face no one understands
    I will never forget your beautiful face
    I will never forget the passion
    Unrequited
    And I will always remember
    The kiss we never shared




    Submitted on 2006-08-27 16:43:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow,this discribes how i feel right now so well,its scary.this one is SO going on my fave list.diff is for me,he knows i like him and i know it will never happen becuse he thinks of me as a sister,anyway...the poem is nice,but it seems kind of unfinished,like theres something more you want to say,but dont know how or are afariad(sorry,i cant spell for crap) to say whats really on your mind and in your heart.so i have a challange for you,take this a step farther,pinpoint exactly how you feel and try to put it into words,like no one will ever read it,or even know about it.if you chose to take the challange and post what you come up with,let me know,i would love to read it.
    talk to you later,

    Keep it real,
    Faith
    | Posted on 2006-08-30 00:00:00 | by Texan_Poet | [ Reply to This ]
      Whew. The kiss you never shared. Yep. I think we all have had that stranger across the table. The one that we'll never get to physically show our love too. But...it still runs as deep as if we might have.

    BCute<3
    | Posted on 2006-08-27 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this. I think that you may be able to come up with a better title than Forget though. I tihnk that Forget is to shallow for this type of poem. I thought it was well written adn you relived that experience very well. The reader, me, felt it and experienced that moment with you through the poem. Good job and keep writing.
    ~Caotic~
    | Posted on 2006-08-27 00:00:00 | by Caotic_Disaster | [ Reply to This ]


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