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    dots Submission Name: Over theredots
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    Author: atonement
    Elite Ratio:    2.71 - 106/186/98
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsOver theredots
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    I stand,
    upon these sands,
    of a place,
    I'm afraid to call home.

    I've been here,
    so long,
    I don't remember,
    anywhere else.

    I think about him,
    10 million miles away,
    safe at home,
    as I wait here,
    hopefully not until my dying day.

    How I long to go home,
    away from the cries,
    far from the blood shed over greed,
    to be with the one I love,
    and not here for just one more night.




    Submitted on 2006-08-27 23:02:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow you found me right where I am at. I leave basicly on the other side of the world from home. And many of your words brought me to feelings I have had at different times. You have a nice form, it keeps the reader with you the whole way through. Keep it up. vi ses jessika
    | Posted on 2006-08-28 00:00:00 | by Artist4rent | [ Reply to This ]


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