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    dots Submission Name: foreign feelingdots
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    Author: musiclee
    ASL Info:    16
    Elite Ratio:    1.84 - 2/5/7
    Words: 149
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsforeign feelingdots
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    its been so long a sleepless yet painless night
    succumbed by the greatest of fears deafened by lines
    an instant of failure the proper moment still stands
    in this book of reconstruction, a legacy of dirty hands
    these killers, smoke thrillers form in-cahoots
    a society of closed doors stationed on platoons
    distorted expressions, a heinous new sound
    troubles my feelings barely seeing around
    no burden can beg, just kneel down and retreat
    im like a dirty ol' sailor begging over the seas
    moving along the footway showering in detectable ties
    filled with porous yet misguided lies
    do you really know what is and isnt real
    a turn to forget, another cheating life deal
    dont trust the ghosts theyll blind with conceit
    leave me behind youre better without my feet
    burnt, broken, and hung this stress is eating my heart
    these memories last forever fainting, dying, hurting with stars




    Submitted on 2006-08-28 03:13:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i like the words you used it was very expressive and i felt passion in your writing but i couldn't quite pick up the reason behind, which i also like becuase of the title though. all in all i think its great
    | Posted on 2006-08-28 00:00:00 | by Seductress | [ Reply to This ]

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.


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