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    dots Submission Name: Just tell me liesdots
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    Author: Valle_Siddious
    ASL Info:    24/Male/Dystopia
    Elite Ratio:    2.51 - 93/94/41
    Words: 60
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1046
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 458



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       Wrote this one yesterday.
    It's.....a poem.


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    dotsJust tell me liesdots
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    Come down to breath.
    The Manic flight.
    Go back beneath,
    the drapes of night.
    Beguile the weak,
    Cut down the wise.
    Don't have to speak,
    just tell me lies.
    Why even try?
    Don't break me down.
    The hope, it dies.
    Sinks into ground.
    Her eyes were distant.
    The words deceiving.
    Throwing down my heart.
    She said.
    "I'm leaving."




    Submitted on 2006-08-28 12:55:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow. Excellent work. It flows very well and the meaning is deep. I also love the slight but brilliant imagery.
    | Posted on 2006-08-28 00:00:00 | by Indaleco | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem for some reasons intrigues me, though to tell you the truth I don't really understand it lol ^_^;;. But I really like the part that says "Just tell me lies." Even though i like honesty, sometimes it's just easier to tell a little white lie to spare someone's feelings. But it doesn't make it right though lol. I think I should follow my own advice. Okay well I dunno if that made sense or if it had anything to do with the poem whatsoever, but oh well bare with me lol. Anyways I just wanted to say I like the poem and that you should keep writing.

    Ash
    | Posted on 2006-09-02 00:00:00 | by Ashuri | [ Reply to This ]


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