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    dots Submission Name: Why Do I Love Youdots

    Author: darkened_soul
    Elite Ratio:    3.38 - 812/868/171
    Words: 246
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1176
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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       This is old. I never posted it before because when I showed it to the person it was written about, I got bad reviews. It stopped me from writing for a long time.

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    dotsWhy Do I Love Youdots

    I love the color of your hair
    How soft and smooth it is
    I love how the sun shines on it
    Forming a glow around your head.
    I love the color of your eyes
    How their both brown and green
    Their so deep and mysterious
    The focus of my every dream.
    I love the way you smile
    How alive it makes you appear
    When you're smiling, so am I
    I'd never shed a tear.
    I love the way your jacket
    Hangs so perfect off your shoulders
    And how your t-shirt crinkles
    So I can't read what it says.
    I love the way you rest your hands
    Half in the pockets of your jeans
    They're always dirty, torn, and faded
    I've yet to see them looking clean.
    I love the confidence you stand with
    How it draws everyone into you
    Your shoulders straight, yet slouched
    Making the confidence seem true.
    I love the way you talk
    How confused your accent sounds
    I could listen for hours, never bore
    Never figiting or moving around.
    I love the way you sing
    There's such a passion in your tone
    You can hit almost every note
    And sound amazing doing so.
    I love the things you say to me
    How you make me feel so alive
    Even with a simple "hello"
    I feel like I'd melt inside.

    So ask "why do you love me?"
    I have enough reasons to
    The simplest explaination I can give:
    I love everything about you.

    Submitted on 2006-08-28 13:10:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I can only hope that I can write a poem like this when I do fall in love. Don't get me wrong,
    I love my girlfriend, but I'm not in love with her. Their is a big diffrence for me. and one day I hope to put into words somehow like you have.

    The Poor Man's Poet.
    | Posted on 2008-03-30 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]
      Aww I thought it was rather cute. It's nice to see how others feel about the upside of love once in a while. Simple & sweet.

    <3 Jess
    | Posted on 2006-09-06 00:00:00 | by Lil J | [ Reply to This ]
      i've read this before... he showed me it. i'm glad you felt that way about someone and had the chance to feel that strongly for someone. i like this peice, its really sweet.
    | Posted on 2006-08-28 00:00:00 | by speedrocketguit | [ Reply to This ]

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