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    dots Submission Name: Labor Day - A Season's Changedots
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    Author: oixi
    ASL Info:    50/M/California
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 196/243/100
    Words: 145
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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    Description:
       A rhyming verse about Labor Day


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    dotsLabor Day - A Season's Changedots
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    Whispery winds blow from far away,
    shrieking like alley cats in heat.
    Signals the valley that Labor Day;
    the end of summer does entreat.

    Mother Nature compels the gale
    to rustle leaves and raise the waves.
    So, year after year, without fail;
    seasons turn like willing slaves.

    And who then is the master in
    this episodic season change?
    Shall we rely on the past to win
    this contest, now that seems so strange?

    The future is swallowed
    by what came before.
    The present seems hollow
    like a cheaply made door.

    This door opens to what will come;
    opened by a steady breeze
    Thus revealing the total sum,
    resulting from a Godly sneeze.

    Winds telegraph summerís end;
    heaven sent by a blast from God.
    And much like the riverís bend;
    sailing may turn from smooth to hard.





    Submitted on 2006-08-28 13:21:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      THis is one of the best pieces I have seen on here in a while. Excellant metre and structure. The words were eloquent and the images pleasing. It is a very enjoyable read and I am happy to have found it.
    Straight to my favs.

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    | Posted on 2006-08-28 00:00:00 | by BenCollier | [ Reply to This ]


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