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    dots Submission Name: Get Outdots

    Author: juss_kriss
    ASL Info:    23/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.87 - 404/445/126
    Words: 192
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Angry
    Total Views: 651
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    dotsGet Outdots

    verse 1:
    i tried to erase you
    from my heart, from my past
    no matter how hard i rub
    part of you always seems to stay
    your mark on my paper heart
    will never go away

    you walked outta my life
    but you moved into my head
    and you won't shut up
    you talk twenty-four, seven
    you said you wanted out
    well i'm not stopping you
    get outta my heart
    get outta my heart
    just get out already

    verse 2:
    i tried to delete you
    from my thoughts, from my mind
    but that stupid computer
    it never seems to work for me
    that file stuck on my harddrive
    will never be erased


    verse 3:
    i tried to ignore you
    close my eyes, plug my ears
    but your words keep getting through
    it's like you're screaming in my ear
    i'm hurting from the ringing
    will you just go away

    i've tried to erase you
    i've tried to delete you
    i've tried to ignore you
    you walked outta my life
    but moved into my head
    get out of my head, head, head
    just get out

    Submitted on 2006-08-28 17:00:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I love this and I can sorta relate from a different perspective on the verses. This is great. I really like the first verse excpetialy :
    "your mark on my paper heart"
    That is an awsome line. Great piece. Write on.

    | Posted on 2006-08-31 00:00:00 | by S.A.M. | [ Reply to This ]

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