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    dots Submission Name: Fade Awaydots
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    Author: celticflame
    ASL Info:    17, Female, Ireland
    Elite Ratio:    2 - 4/15/23
    Words: 123
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 753
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 778



    Description:
       Not much to describe. It's written from the point of view of an abused child.


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    dotsFade Awaydots
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    Bruised and battered
    I huddle in the corner
    Shedding bitter tears.
    He beats me, he abuses me;
    The hurt runs deeper than my wounds.
    Daddy, if you love me,
    Why do you hit me?
    Mommy, if you care
    Why did you leave me?
    My faith alone keeps me going;
    The knowledge that there is something more,
    Something greater waiting for me.
    Mommy, someday I'll find you
    And I'll say what you never said to me:
    I love you.
    Daddy, I forgive you
    And I hope you can love me someday.
    But for now, I sit in the corner
    And hide from the world,
    Waiting for the next blow to fall
    And knowing that it's only a matter of time
    Before I fade away.




    Submitted on 2006-08-28 17:17:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I hate stories like this.

    But, I love writers who make it real for people to read. A voice for those children who don't have one. Whether they are physically, emotionally, or mentally abused. A poet never fails to write a piece on this site every now and then that forms a voice for each one.

    Its a good thing you did here. Beautifully tragic. Sad. Yet, true.

    BCute<3
    | Posted on 2006-08-28 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]
      it's really sad. and yeah tragic. though i think you could have gone into more detail i still think it's a good poem and very meaningful. poems like these are important for people to read so they can understand more.
    | Posted on 2006-08-28 00:00:00 | by beth freese | [ Reply to This ]


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