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    dots Submission Name: Virgindots
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    Author: LameMansTerms
    ASL Info:    36/M/Hermosa Beach, Ca
    Elite Ratio:    4.31 - 713/1012/165
    Words: 145
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1046
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       eh, Ithink sometimes that I fear women because I am totallt afraid of what they can and most of them will do if I let my guard down.....scarry thought....dieing alone


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    dotsVirgindots
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    Virgin


    These lips a virgin to
    One plus one is true
    Another can mean more
    than life to you
    so pure
    one thing
    you know for sure
    is yours

    Forevermore

    And it will endure
    The tests of time
    Minutes in the
    Hours of crime
    all you share
    every glance
    nothing can compare
    to when two share

    True romance

    an unspoken bond
    cant be broke-
    by a joke
    or any stupid thing I wrote
    And I know it
    No whispers in my ear
    or embraces or praises
    Nobody wants me near

    Being alone is what I fear

    Without a tear at my funeral
    I wasnt the light of anybodys life
    Unworthy of love and pitiful
    The unfamiliar, the strange
    I lived in vain
    And died in pain
    I never got to know
    Her real name

    lamemansterms




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      This is beautiful. The one thing I have been learning this year that related alittle to this, is that putting up walls because of heartbreak in the past, won't get you anywhere in the future. "I lived in vain And died in pain"-what a powerful line. I like your style.
    | Posted on 2008-01-12 00:00:00 | by Peachpitt | [ Reply to This ]
      i think everyone fears this, wonders "will i be remembered,will i be loved, or alone?"
    you have touched on something very human, very natural and that we can all relate to
    you seem to have a great talent for making the most common and human things about us as a species and making it something more, something interesting and funny and sweet and something that can draw sympathy or laughs with the flick of a switch

    you are a many splendored and talented writer and i look forward to seeing more

    xoxo
    | Posted on 2007-08-24 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]
      That is my number one fear...death before completion. And my terms of completion are a family, with children, and pure happiness. I fear of being alone as well. Yet, at the time I am settling ok. It's only as bad as one makes it out to be.....yet, there is nothing wrong with that longing for another.

    I feel that we should all put guards up to protect us from harm. Internal harm is much worse then external harm.

    Sad thing.....when we put up these guards they tend to allow us to be too over protective of ourselves. And we ourselves, can be the one that is giving ourself a lonely destiny.

    I loved this write. Think I'm going to fav it.

    The last few posts have been wonderful from you!

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2006-08-29 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      its sad yet so sweet i like the way you were able to put that together as well as the breaks it was like pieces of a puzzle being put together
    | Posted on 2006-08-29 00:00:00 | by Seductress | [ Reply to This ]


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