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    dots Submission Name: Muliflious Residencedots
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    Author: Valle_Siddious
    ASL Info:    24/Male/Dystopia
    Elite Ratio:    2.51 - 93/94/41
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 823
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 580



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    dotsMuliflious Residencedots
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    In my subtle mind, a voice it speaks.
    Foreign words, to you unknown.
    My Mental pipe begins to leak.
    Reveals the past thats never shown.
    Hidden meanings turn to lies/
    Death converts to sorrow.
    Mourning, weeping, crying pain.
    Your courage, can i borrow?
    Tiskit, Taskit, turn your caskit upside
    down and kill the joy.
    Cry and die, go dry those eyes.
    Little left for you dear boy.
    Love and Hate,
    Evaluate your feelings to an end.
    Walking deep into myself
    Reality is to bend.




    Submitted on 2006-08-28 18:56:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      whoa i love the rhyme scheme you got going here. i'm not really quite sure what it was about, but it was fun to read. good job...
    </3 lisa
    | Posted on 2006-08-28 00:00:00 | by 777sacrites777 | [ Reply to This ]


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