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    dots Submission Name: Don't Look At Medots
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    Author: Valle_Siddious
    ASL Info:    24/Male/Dystopia
    Elite Ratio:    2.51 - 93/94/41
    Words: 84
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 940
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 522



    Description:
       Your average everyday, "BadDay" poem.
    It's simple, a little too simple.
    Wrote it like four years ago.


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsDon't Look At Medots
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    I hate the way your always there.
    I hate the way you sit and stare.
    You think that you can understand.
    But attentions not what i demand.
    You say it's one of my hormone rages.
    You say I'm going through some stages.
    You think that you are on the ball.
    But your not even close at all.
    Some things like mine, are not skin deep.
    Beyond the blood is were it creeps.
    The toxin of negativity.
    Just turn your head.
    Don't look at me.




    Submitted on 2006-08-28 19:02:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      great rhythm here. i like this. i get the feeling of just wanting to be left alone. kinda sad feeling.
    good work,
    whirl**
    | Posted on 2006-09-03 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
      Something doesn't have to be complex to be good. Its simplicity is what makes it golden.
    | Posted on 2006-08-28 00:00:00 | by Indaleco | [ Reply to This ]
      that was good. i like how it rhymed. i liked the rhyming a lot. the words all fit in perfect and it jst flowed so well. good writing.

    BrokenxPieces
    | Posted on 2006-08-28 00:00:00 | by BrokenxPieces | [ Reply to This ]


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