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    dots Submission Name: Washing Tattoo'sdots
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    Author: Valle_Siddious
    ASL Info:    24/Male/Dystopia
    Elite Ratio:    2.51 - 93/94/41
    Words: 75
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1047
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 521



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    dotsWashing Tattoo'sdots
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    Searching deep and dust a dawn,
    into my mind a must, its gone.
    A blazing death to demon might.
    Amazing grace and fifteenth sight.
    Locations of the golden, guarding,
    gaven hope and haven hearts.
    Chasing, Chosen, watch the shows
    in
    black and white.
    Death or life.
    Crawling mud and sliding crude of
    nickel keepers, bath time suds.
    To wash away?
    To sting away?
    To burn away?
    Like it's........tatooed in my mind.




    Submitted on 2006-08-28 19:13:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      True, you had a nice flow at the start and then lost it. but it worked out in the end cuz instead of flow, it has a bounce to it. No, seriously, when I read the ending, I almost want to jump along to each syllable, lol. Well, talk to you later!

    =Ayane=
    | Posted on 2006-09-06 00:00:00 | by Ayane | [ Reply to This ]
      you had a flow at the beginning that you kind of lost, but still a great read.
    | Posted on 2006-08-30 00:00:00 | by Jenni Bean | [ Reply to This ]
      f***ing amazing, truly....

    xoxo
    | Posted on 2006-08-31 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]


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