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    dots Submission Name: mourning (part 1)dots
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    Author: eowyn
    ASL Info:    18/f/australia
    Elite Ratio:    5.47 - 227/153/76
    Words: 154
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 167
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    Description:
       my BF is joining the police force. this is a worst case scenario, that terrifies me and i just know taht i will find myself in.


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    dotsmourning (part 1)dots
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    She’s sitting and waiting
    in the cold hard plastic
    seats given to mourners.
    Waiting for news that surely
    will shatter her heart
    and dreams. Plans made
    when she was but a child,
    new to the game of love.

    White-coats scurry back and fourth
    not even glancing.
    It is an all too familiar sight
    to see a young lady
    preparing for bad news.

    At last, she begins to doze.
    A hand, uncomforting,
    descends upon her shoulder.
    Her fear of doctors is forgotten
    in hope of good tidings.
    His eyes are tired and creased,
    his surgery mask about his neck.
    His mouth moves but no sound
    ever reaches her ears.
    She already knows.

    A deeply pained cry erupts
    from the pit of her stomach
    as she crumples to the floor
    forever to be alone.
    White-coats scurry too and fro.
    She is just another mourner.
    Just another fresh widow.




    Submitted on 2006-08-28 19:58:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow this is great. I'd like to tell you not to worry but It hink that would be pointless because it is natural to worry about your loved ones. I recently found myself in a situation where the person I love more than anything in this world was 'missing' in a sense that his mobile phone had died, he wasn't at home, he wasn't at work and his sister had no idea where he was. About an hour went by when I heard that their had been an accident on the road which I knew he travelled daily to and from work and I thought the worst had happened. Well everything turned out to be fine but when my phone rang and the number was anonymous I thought that was it, it was the call from the hospital or the police or someone telling me the worst. Lucky for me it wasn't.

    Back to your poem, the imagery is great I could fully see myself sitting there waiting for the news. I thought this was great and try not to dwell on what might happen. Many people I know have joined the police force and they are fine, besides for the first few years he'll be riding as a passenger and booking people for spending and stuff like that, i think it'll be a few years until he is out doing the dangerous things.

    Babytinkerbelle
    | Posted on 2006-08-30 00:00:00 | by babytinkerbelle | [ Reply to This ]



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