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    dots Submission Name: This Timedots
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    Author: loveispain
    ASL Info:    23/f/ME
    Elite Ratio:    5.37 - 283/198/51
    Words: 168
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1002
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1126



    Description:
       Me and my boyfriend say goodbye a lot with him being in the Marine Corps. I was just out in California to see him..and while I was out there something changed for me, and since I've been home it's been so much harder than all the other times I've been without him. I guess the hardest part is knowing there will be a next time when we will say goodbye..and knowing it could be worse than this time.


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    This Time
    I can't let it go.
    I'm gone, but I'm still there.
    My body is here, but my heart,
    Is with you.
    This time
    I was forever changed,
    By a love and a closeness,
    I've never felt before.
    This Time
    I heard your heart beat,
    In the middle of the night.
    And I felt your hand brush mine,
    In the deepest of sleeps.
    I awoke to your face,
    Inches from mine.
    And I found serenity in your kiss,
    Sincerity in your eyes, And safety in your arms.
    This Time
    My tears are unending,
    And my heart,
    Uwavering.
    This time
    I reached a place,
    Where being sure,
    Doesn't come close to what I feel.
    And being willing to wait a year,
    Became willing to wait forever.
    This time
    I'm not okay,
    It won't get better,
    And I can't find peace.
    I will never find closure.
    This time
    Was nothing like last time
    And will not even begin to compare to
    Next Time.




    Submitted on 2006-08-28 22:49:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      that was very heartfelt. I hope you two are together forever. Thanks for sharing.
    Kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2007-11-29 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
      awwwwwwww....
    you obviously have very deep feelings for this guy. I can't even begin to fathom what you're going through. It's gotta be so painful....to say good-bye so many times. But the fact that you've stuck with him this long is phenomanal.

    This poem greatly shows your love and affection had hardships with him...and your fear of losing him (? took a stab at it...)

    Are you afraid one time you'll say good-bye...and never see him?

    I'm sorry about that...hope it doesn't sound to forward or upsets you...but i know that's what a lot of people think.

    What exactly does he do, tho. i mean, yeah, he's in the Marine Corps., but does he go off and fight, or is this still all the training and so-forth?

    Great write, by the way.

    <darkwinged>
    | Posted on 2006-08-29 00:00:00 | by darkwinged | [ Reply to This ]


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