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    dots Submission Name: A RED SKYdots
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    Author: bigrig0625
    ASL Info:    34 M Tx
    Elite Ratio:    2.96 - 40/73/19
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 855
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    Bytes: 682



    Description:
       I looked at a picture earlier of a red sky and for some reason it puts me in a transe. I don't know if it reminds me of something bad, or I might even like it. I know this: I could stand starring at a red sky in the middle of a desert for hours on end. But the wierd thing is that I don't even know if I like it or not! Wierd huh!


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    dotsA RED SKYdots
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    A red sky
    What a wonderful view

    With colors and swirls
    No clouds No blue

    I gaze at this sight
    With an open mind

    My thoughts and feelings
    I try to unwind

    There's something about
    This amazing scene

    It makes me feel wierd
    Do you know what I mean?

    My eyes become glossy
    My knees become weak

    I'm caught in a transe
    And can't hardly speak

    I do not know why
    They're such beautiful colors

    But it cripples my soul
    Does it do this to others?

    bigrig0625




    Submitted on 2006-08-28 23:14:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I liked how you worded this. Keeping it short and not drawing it out with lots of imagery .. but, letting it express how the red sky made you feel at that moment.
    | Posted on 2006-09-17 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]
      This is beautiful, beautiful imagery and beautiful writing, beautiful, beautiful, beautiful. It takes me to a different place. Like a carefree space where only I stand. I can picture this beautiful sky overhead. Its amazing. I really enjoyed reading this, if you haven't already figured that out. I honestly don't know what else to say.
    ~Caotic~
    | Posted on 2006-08-30 00:00:00 | by Caotic_Disaster | [ Reply to This ]
      i find red skies beautiful.
    but i get that weird 'do i like it or not?' feeling from thunder storms. it is very strange.
    i love the simplicity of this piece, the imagery you put across is great.
    nice job on this one.
    whirl**
    | Posted on 2006-09-03 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]


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