It's good. Creative. The spaces... I don't know about the spaces. They seem to get in the way, yet I'm not sure the piece would have as much to substance without them... yeah, I know that's ironic. Anyway, I did like the last line. It was refreshingly unexpected. If I can say anything about this piece, it's that it is certainly something you don't usually see, and that's not undeserving of commendation... sooo nice work.