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    dots Submission Name: Simpledots
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    Author: Drayke
    Elite Ratio:    3.5 - 65/116/49
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 1101
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       I dont even know what im thinking even submiting this. it seems a waste of time. buuuuut, its feeling.


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    dotsSimpledots
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    Nobody can find me.











    I am alone.











    Deserted.











    Did I drive you away?











    I hope not.











    It seems,











    I broke my own heart.




    Submitted on 2006-08-29 05:04:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      It's good. Creative. The spaces... I don't know about the spaces. They seem to get in the way, yet I'm not sure the piece would have as much to substance without them... yeah, I know that's ironic. Anyway, I did like the last line. It was refreshingly unexpected. If I can say anything about this piece, it's that it is certainly something you don't usually see, and that's not undeserving of commendation... sooo nice work.

    -Lance
    | Posted on 2006-08-29 00:00:00 | by giventofly | [ Reply to This ]


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