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    dots Submission Name: ~I REMEMBER~dots
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    Author: bigrig0625
    ASL Info:    34 M Tx
    Elite Ratio:    2.96 - 40/73/19
    Words: 392
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
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       This is for my big brother. I love him so much! As long as I have him to run to I'll always be a child in my heart.


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    dots~I REMEMBER~dots
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    ~I remember standing behind you when we'd get in trouble.
    ~I remember wanting to ride your bike instead of mine.
    ~I remember when you started school before me i'd carry your lunch and follow you to the bus stop.
    ~I remember you'd make me hide behind a tree when the bus came so they wouldn't see me in my pj's.
    ~I remember trying like crazy to tell time so i'd know when you would get home from school.
    ~I remember chasing you while you chased your friends.
    ~I remember me teaching you how to ride a bike and then couldn't keep up with you.
    ~I remember making you mad enough to chase me away and then running after you again.
    ~I remember you beating me up but then holding my head while I cried.
    ~I remember wanting to sit next to you on the schoolbus so you could watch over me.
    ~I remember not having to think-I'd just ask you.
    ~I remember on my birthday once I picked out a bicycle just like yours and you thought I was silly.
    ~I remember even through high school wanting to sit with you and your friends instead of my own and I remember that you'd let me.
    ~I remember joining Ag class and even signing up for football just because you did.
    ~I remember when I couldn't keep up in football agreeing to disgracefully become the waterboy just so I could be around you in practice.
    ~I remember in high school going to your games when you didn't even know I was there.
    ~I remember people only knowing me by "your little brother". And I remember being proud of that.
    ~I remember when you joined the Navy and I checked out a book on submarines.
    ~I remember hitch hiking to California so you could give me your car while you then walked or rode buses.
    ~I remember how excited I was when you moved back to Tx.
    ~I remember all of this and more.

    ~~But right now what i'm remembering is that you have always been there for me. And I remember you calling me today to see how i'm doing and to say that you loved me.~~


    ~~I remember.....And I LOVE YOU TOO~~



    bigrig0625




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      This is so beautiful. It reaches right into the heart. It is so great that you have your brother, he's lucky to have you too. And it's also so great to see this kind of love between brothers when you're someone, like me, who has a brother that schemes with your father to stomp you into the ground. I wouldn't change a thing - I love the format, it's very original - I love the way this is written. It evokes so much emotion from the reader. I can't even pick my favorite line - they are all gems. Honestly, I wouldn't change a thing. I think it's a masterpiece of the heart.
    | Posted on 2006-09-02 00:00:00 | by Lisa Milligan | [ Reply to This ]
      I thught that this was beautifully written and it sank down into my heart so deeply (good thing). You're asking for someone to relate, and personally, I can't really relate because I have a younger brother, not an older brother, but I sure hope that he respects and loves me the same way as you love your brother. I really enjoyed this heartfelt piece of yours. Great.
    ~Caotic~
    | Posted on 2006-08-30 00:00:00 | by Caotic_Disaster | [ Reply to This ]
      this is sooooooo beautiful!!
    i lost count of the times i went 'aahhhh' as i was reading.
    wow, your love for your brother is obviously something very special to you. very sweet.
    has he read this?? id love to know what the guy thinks. i just dunno wot else to say, so i wont bother you any longer.
    beautiful job!!
    whirl**
    | Posted on 2006-08-29 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]


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