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    dots Submission Name: Her Fearsdots
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    Author: sageeriol
    ASL Info:    23/male/GA.
    Elite Ratio:    3.19 - 314/322/106
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 836
    Average Vote:    1.0000
    Bytes: 671



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       Brandi I am here for you for always. Promise me that you will take all my promises trust them and know them and let yourself realize that they are true. I will never leave I will never let you go and I will destroy anyone that tries to come between us.


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    dotsHer Fearsdots
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    She fears that he will leave.
    She fears his love will cease.
    he holds her close.
    He promises her that her fears are vain.
    Love keeps him coming to her.
    Love guides him to the phone each night to call her, to the computer each day to write her.
    She fears that his promises will run out.
    He knows that his promises are everlasting.
    She fears that he will disappear.
    He takes her hand and holds it tighter.
    He pulls her near.
    He whispers as he kisses her cheek
    "Do not fear, for tommorrow I will be here next to you still and ever after."
    He kisses away her tears.




    Submitted on 2006-08-29 11:30:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      that is so beautiful and very nicely written..my boyfriend says promises the same things and it sounds as though i have some very similar fears to what you describe here ...thanks so much for sharing..it make s me realise even more that i just have to trust and take a chance :)
    | Posted on 2012-01-28 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]
      aww that's really sweet lol the format itself as fab pointed out could use a little work, maybe in the format and it got a little repititious but come on, with a message like that who's really counting how many times someone used a few words? I'm not really sure what to say that hasn't been said, I think its really sweet of you to recognize your gf's fears and try to reassure her a lot of girls wish they had bf's like that so way to go, lol nice write <3
    | Posted on 2007-01-21 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. This is a great poem to show your girlfriend. If you already did, I bet she trusts you now.
    I wish every guy felt the same about their girl. but... that's only a wish. It's not likely to happen.
    But this poem shows that you love her so much, you'll do anything to stay together. Did I say ANYTHING? I think you really mean what you wrote and I hope you have a great relationship!

    ~*~ Lisa ~*~
    | Posted on 2006-08-29 00:00:00 | by Nani | [ Reply to This ]
      how sweet! you are every girl's dream come true... I want my husband to feel the same way... I can tell that this was heart-felt, and it is comforting to know that this kind of love is possible... thank you, Shalini Bridges
    | Posted on 2006-08-29 00:00:00 | by sbridges | [ Reply to This ]
      what can i say about it , i dont wanna ruin it ... cuz it is too sweet i guess... well all women will like this kinda writes.. and some part of me want to like it ... but ... it needs improving... tooo much repetition of words, that doesnt help much let me tell you friend... well try to improve it and keep writing and if u have time please tke a look to writing, i would appreciate if yuou leave a comment on those ..
    have a nice day and peace and love
    Victor
    | Posted on 2006-08-29 00:00:00 | by vitoko | [ Reply to This ]
      As sweet as the idea is, i think the poem could need improvement.
    a lot of repetition of words that could be changed. Anyway, it was sweet and it's the thought that counts, right?
    your girlfriend is lucky.
    | Posted on 2006-08-30 00:00:00 | by fabulousAMY | [ Reply to This ]


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