I stepped over my bounds Let my lyrics Ring bells Like penitenry cells (did you mean penitentiary?) Sealed with cement blocks With holding my words In this place I call jail
This was good! I liked the way that you decided to rhythmatically display this one. It all flowed very very well. Almost as though it had a waterfall affect. You really took the reader into this longing for the love emotion.
I don't see anything other then what I listed above that needs any kind of critiquing. You really did do an oustanding job! I applaud you!