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    dots Submission Name: Happiness is Painfuldots
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    Author: Forver_lost
    ASL Info:    16mhell aka tenn
    Elite Ratio:    2.21 - 28/44/31
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsHappiness is Painfuldots
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    What does it take to be happy with you?

    feeling all this emotion its like you never really liked me,

    you ripped my heart out, you raped my thoughts with your beauty.

    you made me happy and then you make me sad, you just wasted my life, my time.

    I thought to myself is happiness supossed to hurt this much,

    I know it's not a cake walk but really does it have to be this painful,

    you were hurting me but you seemed happy and thats all that mattered,

    I was happy to see you smile,So why does it hurt for you to be happy?




    Submitted on 2006-08-29 13:22:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow....i like it,im going through hell with realtionships right now too.....[censored] im getting raped by her beauty too...damn i like this
    | Posted on 2006-08-29 00:00:00 | by Master Bates | [ Reply to This ]
      Nicely put, I know exactly how you feel, If you read some of my works you will see I am having alot of the same things going on, I really relate to this line: "you just wasted my life, my time." There is nothing worse than feeling like a whole relationship was nothing more than wasted time.
    | Posted on 2006-08-29 00:00:00 | by Survivor_Dean | [ Reply to This ]
      My Favorite Poem So Far...Original And I love the style.
    | Posted on 2006-08-29 00:00:00 | by LovelyGoddess | [ Reply to This ]


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