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    dots Submission Name: ScapeGoatdots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 652
    Average Vote:    2.5000
    Bytes: 839



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       Again I wrote this in my one class.. Family Living.. the topic today was disfunctional families... ***ROLLS EYES**


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    I relize now
    That I was simply the scapegoat
    In the disaster
    that I was caught up in
    It all began so long ago
    and this disaster that I speak of
    Is over and dealt with
    But forever will live on
    In my life
    In my mind, body, and soul
    and forever my life has been changed..
    For better or worse
    I cannot say
    For can't you see?
    I'm the apperent problem here
    I always have been
    but I never asked for this
    I never wanted this
    Yet here I am...
    With these tears steaming down my cheeks...
    and crys so loud but are mute to those who surround me..
    Here I am
    Somewhere... I never ask to be
    So worthless
    Unwanted..
    and ingored..
    Yet I still remain the problem...




    Submitted on 2006-08-29 14:43:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Another good poem jackie, you have a way of letting the reader know that you have been through some serious [censored] in your life, your style is improving the more you write, keep it up, I really like your work, Dean
    | Posted on 2006-08-30 00:00:00 | by Survivor_Dean | [ Reply to This ]
      An excellent poem, indeed.
    Are you studying to be a psychologist?
    Just curious, since your taking family living class.
    But, i don't know if this is what your looking for or not.
    Your poem was entitled escape goat.
    I'm pretty sure why you named the poem that.
    But the word i think you were looking for is ScapeGoat.
    The Scapegoat in a situation, is the one that takes all of the blame.
    Yes, you did use the term right.
    But it's only spelled wrong.
    I too have been the scapegoat in a relationship.
    So i think i may know how you feel.
    Well written.
    Write on.

    Valle_Siddious
    | Posted on 2006-08-29 00:00:00 | by Valle_Siddious | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a emotional poem, it touches my heart for i know i am a ugly duck, i to never wanted to be one bu t maybe this what is known as destiny.

    all the lines looks so much natural, looks like just flowing out of your heart.
    this is a world where people, stand on you to look tall, hug you to show others that they are generous, they blame their mistakes on you. Here rules changes according to their needs, what they say is truth and their ignorance is false.

    Its so painful that when you cry world tends be dead, they only respons to shouts for they don't want disturbance. It strange why they choose to be irresponsible towards others.

    you are a good poet, its easy to relate to your poem, thses are simple but deep.

    bye
    nishant
    | Posted on 2006-09-03 00:00:00 | by imagination | [ Reply to This ]


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