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Spiritless


Author: Poetic Ways
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Words: 133
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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Spiritless



A downcast on these high spirits of life,
A heart full of desolation a mind of strife,
Lingering misery in these eyes of pain,
Desires of hope... Devastation I gain,
Sweet agony with increasing distress,
A head held high never the less,
A breaking point is visible indeed in sight,
A lonley drop of a tear on any given night,
Unbalanced state of mind un-easy at heart,
A never ending path to no where from the start,
No need for help I never seek something I wont find,
Take it how you please or pay it no mind,
Appreciation to the hands that all may lend,
But I know I'll be alone in the very end,
Call it depression in the dark of despondency,
But alone I will fight off every suicidal tendency!




Submitted on 2006-08-30 01:41:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Suicidal Tendencies-wicked band.You look like you're a fan.
| Posted on 2006-08-31 00:00:00 | by Asakura Cowboy | [ Reply to This ]


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