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    dots Submission Name: I've Lostdots
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    Author: Poetic Ways
    Elite Ratio:    1.31 - 9/24/26
    Words: 187
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 659
    Average Vote:    3.0000
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    I've lost many and I'm not afraid to continue to lose,
    Why is everyone against me what is it I need to prove,

    Hopeless dreams are all that I've been living,
    So when I awake A lonsome life is what I'm given,

    Change is inevitable so why try and hide from it,
    It has become apparent in my life and I have yet to quit,

    I've come to realize the reason I've been losing and losing,
    When it comes to life the careless choices are what I'm choosing,

    Things were going great and then it's like an explosion occurred,
    All the great things I had came crumbling down...Let's spread the word,

    Let's make it obvious that things couldn't get much worse,
    I was living my own dream ,and awakened I was, by a curse,

    With a somber outlook on life I question my own existence,
    My mind requests death but my heart shows some resistence,

    So as my goal for happiness progresses at a tedious pace,
    I eagerly wait for the day a real smile is present on my face!




    Submitted on 2006-08-30 01:56:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow thats really good!

    <3 Brittaney-Mae
    | Posted on 2006-09-19 00:00:00 | by justkillme08 | [ Reply to This ]
      Sounds more like R-A=P
    | Posted on 2006-08-30 00:00:00 | by codemaster21 | [ Reply to This ]
      Its beautiful... it may sound like rap,but I'm not sure if he could "rap" it like you. You don't need a degree in poetry to be able to express yourself,just inspiration and belief and passion. I for one liked it,and one is a good place to start....

    Pix
    | Posted on 2006-09-01 00:00:00 | by pixie_007 | [ Reply to This ]


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