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Heart On Deadline

Author: juss_kriss
ASL Info:    23/F/Canada
Elite Ratio:    3.87 - 404 /445 /126
Words: 229
Class/Type: Lyrics /BrokenHeart
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basically about waiting around for this one person who's taking their time to come back, but in the end, you don't want them anymore cause you've waited too long and they missed their chance.

Heart On Deadline

verse 1:
seconds tick by
as minutes fade away
i sit and patiently wait
for and end to come
or a new beginning
whichever comes first
will relieve my soul
cause it's hard to hold on
when i'm ready to let go

i've been holding on, for so long
and if you won't take my hand
then i'll choose to move on
my heart is running out of patience
so it's your turn to decide
and you're running out of time
cause my heart is on a deadline

verse 2:
days pass by
and weekends disappear
i swear i won't cry
if i don't hear from you
oh you have your own life
and i have mine
but i want you here
it's so hard to hold on
cause i'm ready to let go


verse 3:
months creep past
and i am losing count
of all the times i've cried
i've sat here to wait
but it's getting too late
and i can't take it
i want you with me
but it's hard to hold on
and i'm ready to move on


i've been holding on for too long
and if you won't take my hand
i'll be moving on
you're running out of time
you're running out of time
cause my heart is on a deadline

Submitted on 2006-08-30 10:00:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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i think this is the first time i am reading your lyrics. I never really had the experience in waiting for someone to come around and grab my hand to tell me they want me but i really tried to understand what you were saying and i think i got the general message as to what you were saying. It's pretty cool to actually feel something you never felt before and being able to understand the other's point of view. So thanks for sharing this piece.

I don't really think a heart is on a deadline honestly because once it begins beating, it never really stops unless you run out of patience. It's all about what you are willing to do for this love except for waiting. Waiting doesn't really help too much. As my b/f says "I'm not psychic, if you want something, tell me, i can't get into your head". So instead of waiting, go for it or at least indicate some signs. Waiting is a waste of time unless you've done all you could and patience is what you need at that time.

My only suggestions is to use capital letter for "I", it kinda looks bad in english language. I don't really know how lyrics go these days but i am sure they still use capital "I".

Anyhow, nicely done.
Take care....
| Posted on 2006-09-04 00:00:00 | by charmedidentity | [ Reply to This ]
  I really like this one Kriss. One of your best in a while girl. I really like the idea behind it. I love the last bit of the chorus,
" so it's your turn to decide
and you're running out of time
cause my heart is on a deadline"
The whole chorads is awsome though. Great piece Kriss. Keep on writing.

| Posted on 2006-08-31 00:00:00 | by S.A.M. | [ Reply to This ]

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