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    dots Submission Name: Self Stagedots
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    Author: wallya20
    ASL Info:    18/m/Bahamas
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 113/68/26
    Words: 257
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 753
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1494



    Description:
       a poem to myself telling me exactly what i feel...this is like my true feelings speaking to my physical being aight


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    dotsSelf Stagedots
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    So I stand on my own stage
    Looking out into time mind and mouth stuck
    What am I suppose to say?
    Speak what my heart has spoken.
    Please ears have taken in enough negative to make the whole world cry
    Iíll go and dig in sand to find a grain of my integrity
    Maybe the tough exterior and partial feeling is part of my inheritance
    Even though I tell myself I am me and no one else is
    I control my own destiny and no one else thinks
    So I put a double standard on myself, now
    Iíll watch as my impartial self being becomes extinct
    Hide everything thatís a familiar instinct
    Wishes make thoughts become an incomplete reality
    Not at all see through my tears are real
    Look closer and youíll see my pain people
    Facing wars within ourselves,
    Insanity is the closest thing to sane people
    Supposedly Iím socially irresponsible for believing things could be better
    I speak to the walls and they answer with parodies
    Novels of insecurity and self hate, self mutilation and all things the world face
    Held a debate with myself for the first time I won but I donít know which side
    Blind of things ahead but Iíll walk the pavement to see where exactly I end up
    I got it Iíll walk backwards that way I donít have to stop
    Because I wonít know where to go and when to stop
    My, what else to sayÖ..
    My story is told, this is for the self hater




    Submitted on 2006-08-30 12:37:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Seems like you have gone on stage and let your emotions take over control. I guess it is always great to express your emotions although sometimes it brings you into a lot of trouble and sometimes you wished you didn't have any of those emotions.

    I guess it's good to write about what you think and what you feel and just say it straight out instead of keeping it in. As noticed in this piece, you were simply expressing your thoughts, nothing more. Best to write it out than to do anything wrong about it.

    Good write.
    Take care....
    ~Irina
    | Posted on 2006-08-31 00:00:00 | by charmedidentity | [ Reply to This ]
      I like how this feels ... it feels like when you pick yourself apart.... like watching yourself on stage. good point, there.
    I don't feel a flow really in it, but I dig the thoughts.
    this part really grabbed me:

    "Iíll go and dig in sand to find a grain of my integrity"

    when you're looking at your own life and judging it... it is hard to find integrity.

    jess
    | Posted on 2006-09-01 00:00:00 | by parabola | [ Reply to This ]


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