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    dots Submission Name: **Is itdots
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    Author: Caotic_Disaster
    ASL Info:    16/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 447/349/148
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 820
    Average Vote:    4.5000
    Bytes: 719



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       Just a little something I threw together..didn't turn out how i wanted it to but...hey..thats what
    happens..tell me what u think...don't be afraid to comment


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    dots**Is itdots
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    Is it a shame,
    That I've never loved?
    I've never shown affection
    For a stranger
    Whom I've never met,
    Who'd look me in the eyes
    And say 'I Love you.'

    Is it a problem,
    That I've never felt the passion
    Of a luxurious kiss
    From a first love
    Who'd draw me in affectionately
    Welcoming me to his world
    And say 'Stay with me'?

    Is it okay,
    That I keep my independence?
    Listen to the beat of my own heart,
    The thoughts within my head
    Make my own decisions
    That decide the fate of my future
    Which I myself will live.




    Submitted on 2006-08-30 12:43:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this poem, it makes me feel like it ok to...
    Be me, to be single, to love and not be in love.

    The Poor Man's Poet.
    | Posted on 2006-08-31 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]
      Ummm.....being of sound mind and a world famous artist I would say that uhhhhhhh.....jk.lol



    It's good and it's a good idea to write about and I think that it reflects your age. And I don't mean that in a bad way. It's not unusual at your age to wonder and question love or will there ever be love in my life. And also at your age it's surely something that you begin to long for. But be careful because when love does strike, you are the only one who can decifer if it's real or not! If not, there's many artist on here that find their inspiration through untrue love. Just look in the postings any given day and you'll see what I mean! lol


    I like it though,
    And I like you, you're cool,


    ~bigrig0625~
    | Posted on 2006-08-30 00:00:00 | by bigrig0625 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow this is a very interestin, good and sad poem all in one usually one writes a poem about their love for someone and how much they miss themm or love them or something like that but you took a different pattern and chose to say that you don't feel love for stranges or have ever felt love. But trust me I see your only turning 15, and if you say u haven't felt "love" that is good actually cause it means that you haven't mistaken love for infatuation or lust and that showas your maturity but you will experience love one of these days we all experience our first love cause they help us learn how to love one another and strangers.

    much LOVE
    (and sorry I haven't able to comment your work like I said I would)
    James
    | Posted on 2006-08-30 00:00:00 | by James Reyna | [ Reply to This ]
      It most certainly is ok
    I am a 37 year old man who has never experienced True Love as in a relationship and to be honest with you I dont think I ever will
    Call me a Mommas boy if you want But I will never ever Love another as much as I Love my Mother
    She means the World to me
    You are a very strong person for making this decission
    Always remember True Love has to come to You You cant go looking for it
    Excellent Job!!
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-08-30 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree with everyone else. It's fine. It's sad. But, it's fine. It's I suppose normal for more and more people today. It's so hard to find love. And, then you think you do and it turns out to be false. What you thought was love was lust and what you thought was passion was a desperation to make it work.


    BCute<3

    You captured all the thoughts and feelings well.

    <3
    | Posted on 2006-08-30 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]
      thiks is definitly an originial it took me from what i thought it would be to something completely different i was expecting a love story ... you ask a good question is it? i wouldn't say it isnt but it now makes me question whther it would have been better to stay that way ive been in love been beaten and left alone been down and depressed been pushed and in problems all the negative feelings love can bring with it makes me question why anyone would try it... but when you feel it oyu will know exactly why everything in this life has consequences we all do things we know will have negative effects whether its right after or years later so is it safe to say that love is worth the risk...when you cfan bring question to light that no one would think about is a great write i enjoyed this it made me think before i speak and we see less and less of real writes keep going alright
    | Posted on 2006-08-30 00:00:00 | by wallya20 | [ Reply to This ]


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